As writers, we’re often told to “show, don’t tell.” But what does this actually mean, and how can we implement it in our work? I had to keep an eye out in my new novel, Cults, Coffee and Close Encounters as it’s EASY to fall into this trap. This powerful technique can transform your writing from bland to vivid, engaging readers on a deeper level. Let’s explore the concept with some examples.
What is “Show, Don’t Tell”?
“Show, don’t tell” is a writing technique that aims to immerse the reader in the story by using descriptive language, sensory details, and actions rather than simply stating facts or emotions. It allows readers to experience the story more fully and draw their own conclusions.
Examples of Showing vs. Telling
Emotion:
Telling: John was angry.
Showing: John’s fists clenched, his jaw tightened, and a vein pulsed in his forehead as he glared at the computer screen.
Character trait:
Telling: Sarah was kind.
Showing: Sarah noticed the elderly woman struggling with her groceries. Without hesitation, she rushed over, offering to carry the heavy bags to the woman’s car.
Setting:
Telling: It was a cold winter day.
Showing: Icicles hung from the eaves, and each breath formed a small cloud in the frigid air. People hurried down the sidewalk, hunched against the biting wind, their faces barely visible beneath scarves and hats.
Tension:
Telling: The room was tense.
Showing: Silence fell over the boardroom. The executives avoided eye contact, fidgeting with pens and shuffling papers as they waited for the CEO to speak.
Time passing:
Telling: Hours went by.
Showing: The sun crept across the sky, shadows lengthening as afternoon faded into evening. Street lamps flickered to life one by one, and the rush of commuters gave way to the quiet hum of the night.
Why “Show, Don’t Tell” Works
Engages the senses: By providing vivid details, you allow readers to see, hear, smell, taste, and feel what’s happening in the story.
Creates emotional connection: Showing characters’ actions and reactions helps readers empathize and connect with them on a deeper level.
Improves pacing: Descriptive scenes can slow down important moments, while summarizing less crucial parts can speed up the narrative.
Encourages active reading: By showing rather than telling, you invite readers to interpret the scene and draw their own conclusions.
Adds depth: Showing can reveal multiple layers of meaning, enriching your story and characters.
Tips for Mastering “Show, Don’t Tell”
Use strong verbs: Replace generic verbs with more specific, evocative ones.
Incorporate sensory details: Appeal to all five senses in your descriptions.
Describe body language: Show characters’ emotions through their actions and physical reactions.
Use dialogue: Let characters reveal information and emotions through their words and tone.
Provide concrete details: Replace abstract concepts with specific examples.
Remember, “show, don’t tell” isn’t a hard and fast rule. Sometimes, telling is more appropriate, especially for less important information or when you need to move the story along quickly. The key is finding the right balance for your narrative.
By mastering the art of showing, you’ll create more engaging, immersive writing that will captivate your readers and bring your stories to life.
Aaron Lamb 